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■ Read the essay topic, and brainstrorm your ideas and brainstorming map. And complete the following outline. And based on your outline, complete following essay.
<< Essay Question >>
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is important to know about events happening around the world that are not related to you. Use specific reason and examples to support your answer.
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<< Essay Writing Process for Affirmative Stance >>
■ Brainstorming
▪ Entire world's economy > connected
- events in other countries > affect finances
- e.g. changes in price of oil in Middle East
▪ Globally spreading disease
- which diseases are breaking out & where
- e.g. SARS
▪ Many people moving to foreign countries
- know about the safety level of many places
- e.g. aunt living in Europe
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■ Outlining & Organizing
[ Thesis statement ]
▪ We live in an age of globalization, and the fact that the world is closer than it has ever been before makes it imperative that people know what events are happening around the world.
[ Topic sentence-1 ]
▪ Because the entire world's economy is connected, events in one part of the world can affect those in other parts of the planet.
- People's finances are connected to other parts of the world.
- e.g. changes in the price of oil in the Middle East.
[ Topic sentence-2 ]
▪ People need to be on the lookout for negative factors like the spreading of diseases globally.
- People should be aware of which diseases are where.
- e.g. a recent epidemic of SARS
[ Topic sentence-3 ]
▪ More and more people are moving to different areas around the world today, which requires them to keep informed about what is going on in many places.
- They need to know about the safety level of those places.
- e.g. my aunt who moved to Europe
[ Summary ]
▪ It is crucial that people keep track of world events because they can affect people's finances, health, and even their safety.
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■ Completing the Essay
[[ Opening sentence ]]
▪ There are a large number of people who are content not to know what is happening in the world around them.
[ Thesis statement ]
▪ But we live in an age of globalization, and the fact that the world is closer than it has ever been before makes it imperative that people know what events are happening around the world.
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[[ Topic sentence-1 ]]
▪ Because the entire world's economy is connected, events in one part of the world can affect those in other parts of the planet.
[ General statement ]
▪ So many people's financial situations are connected to events that are happening in other countries.
[ Example ]
▪ One obvious example is the price of oil. Since much of it comes from the Middle East, people need to pay attention to what is happening in that turbulent region.
▪ If the price of gas rises there, the prices of many more goods in other countries will also increase.
[ Closing sentence ]
▪ Keeping an eye on world events ensures that a person will be prepared for such changes.
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[[ Topic sentence-2 ]]
▪ People also need to be on the lookout for negative factors like the spreading of disease globally.
[ General statement ]
▪ Because of the higher incidence of travel, people need to be aware of what illnesses are appearing throughout the world.
[ Example ]
▪ For instance, the SARS virus spread from China to other parts of the world just recently, and it killed hundreds of people before it was finished.
▪ People must know about these kinds of events so that they can avoid affe
[ Closing sentence ]
▪ After all, taking a vacation to other countries without any information on these kinds of diseases could be the worst thing for your health.
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[[ Topic sentence-3 ]]
▪ Finally, more and more people are moving to different areas around the world today, which requires them to keep informed about what is going on in many places.
[ General statement ]
▪ They need to know about the safety level of the places where they might be moving or where their friends and family members are living.
[ Example ]
▪ For example, my aunt moved to Europe recently, so now I keep track of the news there to make sure everything is find in her new home.
[ Closing sentence ]
▪ With families and friends spread out all over the world, events in other places can affect many people.
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[[ Summary ]]
▪ In Summary, it is crucial that people keep track of world events because they can affect people's finances, health, and even their safety.
[ Final comment ]
▪ We are truly living in a global community, so we cannot afford to be isolated from one another.
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<< Essay Writing Process for Negative Stance >>
■ Brainstorming
▪ Events happening too far away
- no need to learn about these events
- e.g. volcanic eruption in Indonesia
▪ Events happening to total strangers
- no interest in lives of strangers
- e.g. civil wares in Africa
▪ International news ≠ my priority or concern
- no time to learn about events in other countries
- e.g. interested in family, school, & friends
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■ Outlining & Organizing
[ Thesis statement ]
▪ It is not important that people know about the events that are happening in remote countries.
[ Topic sentence-1 ]
▪ So many events that happen take place too far away from me to have any direct influence on my life.
- There is no need to learn about these far-off events.
- e.g. a volcanic eruption in Indonesia
[ Topic sentence-2 ]
▪ Most international events happen to complete strangers whom I will never have anything to do with.
- I am not interested in the lives of people I do not know.
- e.g. civil wars in Africe
[ Topic sentence-3 ]
▪ There is only so much time to do all the things that I need to do each day, so taking in international news is not one of my priorities.
- I do not have enough time to learn about faraway events.
- e.g. my priorities - family, schoolwork, and friends.
[ Summary ]
▪ I do not think it is so important to learn about world events because of their lack of importance in our lives, the fact that they happen to complete strangers, and my inability to spare enough time to learn about these events.
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■ Completing the Essay
[[ Opening sentence ]]
▪ A number of various events take place every day in every county all around the globe.
[ Thesis statement ]
▪ However, it is not important that people know about the events that are happening in remote countries.
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[[ Topic sentence-1 ]]
▪ First of all, so many events that happen take place too far away from me to have any direct influence on my life.
[ General statement ]
▪ Therefore, there is no real need to know about these foreign events because they will not affect us in anyway at all.
[ Example ]
▪ The news last night ran a story about a volcano erupting in Indonesia. While it maybe an interesting story, that event in no way at all has anything to do with my life.
[ Closing sentence ]
▪ As for me, I am more concerned about what happens in my neighborhood, not in some far-off land.
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[[ Topic sentence-2 ]]
▪ Most international events happen to complete starngers whom I will never have anything to do with.
[ General statement ]
▪ I will never meet these people, so it is hard for me to be interested in their lives.
[ Example ]
▪ For instance, while there may be some civil was going on in Africa, those battles have no bearing on my life. I cannot bring myself to learn about them at all.
[ Closing sentence ]
▪ Unless I know the person directly involved in the news, global events are of little concern to me.
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[[ Topic sentence-3 ]]
▪ There is only so much time to do all the things what I need to do each day, so taking in international news is not one of my priorities.
[ General statement ]
▪ I simply do not have the time to learn about events happening on other countries.
[ Example ]
▪ My priorities are my family, my schoolwork, and my friends.
▪ Most people are the same as me. People care about the events and people near them.
[ Closing sentence ]
▪ Global events are just not that high in importance to most people.
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[[ Summary ]]
▪ I do not think it is so important to learn about world events because of their lack of importance in our lives, the fact that they happen to complete strangers, and my inability to spare enough time to learn about these events.
[ Final comment ]
▪ Simply put, these events need to have some kind of direct effect on people before they will take notice of them.
Source : Excerpted from "How to master skills for the TOEFL"