Spongebob Olivia's summary

[Olivia]

The title of this story is "An entire night at SpongeBob's house."
SpongeBob arrived at 6 p.m. and was impressed by the mess surprise party.
At 7:15 p.m., Patrick and the squirrels fought for the TV. At 8:45 p.m., SpongeBob gave a massage. At 9:30 PM, SpongeBob's pet got arms and legs, so Crab cut them. At 10 p.m., SpongeBob read a scary book and couldn't fall asleep. At 10:20 p.m., SpongeBob kept biting his nails, and the squirrel helped him, but it didn't work.
At 11:10 p.m., a thief was into SpongeBob's house and took control of his pet's word.
At 11:55 p.m., Spongebob's house was in mess. At 1 a.m., SpongeBob tried to sleep, but he couldn't. At 3:45 a.m., Padrick and SpongeBob played together. At 6 a.m., SpongeBob was wake up by the machine and went to work.
I think this story is fun.

[Teacher1]

The title of this story is "An Entire Night at SpongeBob's House."

SpongeBob arrived at 6 p.m. and was impressed by the surprise party mess. (Reordered for clarity)

At 7:15 p.m., Patrick and the squirrels fought for the TV.

At 8:45 p.m., SpongeBob gave a massage.

At 9:30 p.m., SpongeBob's pet got arms and legs, so Mr. Krabs cut them. (Clarified character and added title)

At 10 p.m., SpongeBob read a scary book and couldn't fall asleep.

At 10:20 p.m., SpongeBob kept biting his nails, and the squirrel helped him, but it didn't work.

[Teacher1]

At 11:10 p.m., a thief broke into SpongeBob's house and took control of his pet's world. (Corrected "was into" to "broke into" and clarified "word" to "world")

At 11:55 p.m., SpongeBob's house was a mess. (Simplified sentence)

At 1 a.m., SpongeBob tried to sleep, but he couldn't.

At 3:45 a.m., Patrick and SpongeBob played together. (Corrected spelling)

At 6 a.m., SpongeBob was woken up by the machine and went to work. (Corrected tense)

I think this story is fun.