The title of this book is "Welcome to the Fan Club." The main Character character is Ava. She read Harry Potter Series the Harry Potter series. But she had many questions. So she search searched the internet. Then she find found a Harry Potter fan club. She joined this fan club and she saw the discussion page. And Ava remake remade Harry Potter and upload uploaded it to the fan club. Many people like liked her story. And she said, "Being a fan is so fun!" After reading this book is good. After reading this book, I think it is good.
Score: B
Tips)
'주인공'은 'main character'로 소문자로 써요.
'해리 포터 시리즈'는 'the Harry Potter series'로 써요. 'the'를 잊지 마세요.
과거 시제를 사용할 때는 동사의 형태를 바꿔야 해요. 예: 'searched', 'found', 'liked'
'리메이크하다'는 'remake'의 과거형인 'remade'로 써요.
'업로드하다'는 'upload'의 과거형인 'uploaded'로 써요.
마지막 문장은 조금 어색해요. '이 책을 읽고 나서, 나는 이 책이 좋다고 생각한다'로 바꾸면 더 자연스러워요.