[Corrected] Re:hell-like Green Line

[Jim Lee]

Your writing	My corrections
I usually take the subway to go to hakwon. when I come back home as well. unfortunately, even as I go to hakwon, hundreds of commuters go to the office. when I am on the way to hakwon, the situation defies description. Actually, Using the public transportation is better than people who drive a private car but our nation's public transportation is very confused. So such a demand is incoherent. Anyway, The winner amid the confusion is our great aunties.... As soon as the train's door opens, aunties board quickly. Most of the seats are occupied by aunties.. It is real power of aunties.. Besides, the subway give me many interests. For example,  The guy who sing a song in the subway, many vendors, drunken people etc. Although the subway's congestion makes me unpleased, unexpected situation gives me many interests..	I usually take the subway to go to the hakwon. when I and come back home as well. uUnfortunately, when even as I go to the hakwon, there are hundreds of other commuters who also go to their offices. wWhen I am on the way to the hakwon, the situation defies any description I can come up with in my head. Actually, I guess Uusing the public transportation is better than people who drive a private car driving but our nation's public transportation is very confusing confused. So such a demand to use public transportation is incoherent. Anyway, The winner amid the confusion is our great aunties.... ....(aunties???) As soon as the train's door opens, aunties board quickly. Most of the seats are occupied by aunties.. It is the real power of aunties.. Besides, the subway amuses me in many ways give me many interests. For example,  The a guy who sings a song in the subway, or the many vendors that walk up and down the carts, and even the drunken people are sometimes interesting to me etc. Although the subway's congestion makes me unhappy unpleased, unexpected situations gives keep me many interested interests..
Comment: Great writing…it was your best writing so far.  Keep it up.