Re: Max and ruby jinwoong

[Teacher1]

The title of the story is "Grandma's Treasure Hunt."

Max and Ruby go went on a treasure hunt.
They looked around and headed to a playground to find the treasure.

While Max is playing was playing in the playground,
Ruby and Lewis Louise have a treasure found the treasure.
They find the treasure and get it found it and took it.

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Score: B

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Tips)

• 과거형: 이야기에서는 go → went, is playing → was playing, find → found처럼 과거형을 써야 해요.

• 이름 주의: "Lewis"는 → Louise가 맞아요 (루이즈).

• 자연스러운 표현: "have a treasure"는 found the treasure로 고치는 게 더 정확해요.

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