Re: Caillou's Missing Sock-안하은

[Teacher1]

The title of this story is "Caillou's Missing Sock."

Caillou likes socks, but there was only one sock.

So Caillou wanted to look in the laundry,
but he couldn’t see because he was very short.

Then Caillou brought a chair,
but the door handle broke, so he got trapped.

If I were in that situation, I would be scared.

Then Caillou's dad helped him look in the laundry room,
but they couldn’t find Caillou's sock.

When I lose my things, I feel very embarrassed and sad.

Then, thanks to his mom’s hint, Caillou found his sock!

I think he looks very happy.

If I found my lost items, I would be happy too.

Score: C+

Tips)

1. 문법: "Cauillou wants to see in the laundry" → "Caillou wanted to look in the laundry." (wants 대신 과거형 wanted, 그리고 see in 대신 look in이 자연스러워요.)
2. 문법: "Then Cauillou bring the chair but the door handle break" → "Then Caillou brought a chair, but the door handle broke." (bring의 과거형은 brought, break의 과거형은 broke예요.)
3. 문법: "If I'm in that situation scary." → "If I were in that situation, I would be scared." (가정법을 올바르게 수정했어요.)
4. 문법: "Then Cauillou's Dad for togater laungry room but no have Cauillou's socks." → "Then Caillou's dad helped him look in the laundry room, but they couldn’t find Caillou's sock." (문장을 더 자연스럽게 정리했어요.)
5. 내용: Caillou가 양말을 찾았을 때 어떤 기분이었는지, 그리고 이야기의 교훈이 무엇인지 더 추가하면 더 좋은 글이 될 거예요! 😊