Re: 1C210.adam

[Teacher1]

The title is "Milly, Molly and Pennyroyal". In the early morning the the cows came the to Milly and Molly. Farmer Hegarty and Milly and Molly . were behind the fence. "Come on girls," Farmer Hegarty called. "Come on girls," Called called Milly and Molly. But Pennyroyal was different. The Pennyroyal was always angry. She refused to walk in the middle. Pennyroyal spilled the milk. The Pennyroyal broke the fence . and chased Farmer Hegarty. The farmer Farmer Hegarty came out brought out a mirror. Pennyroyal looked at her angry face. She walked in the front. The Pennyroyal was happy. The story is good. I think Pennyroyal similar is similar to my brother.

Score: B

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