Re: Max and Ruby (Alexander)

[Teacher Winget]

Ruby came to clean up with Max.
Max put put a popsicle on his shoes.
The popsicle was melting.
Ruby cleaned the dirt and books.
Max puts put some dirt in his pocket.
Ruby accidentally stepped on the sticky object.
Ruby cleaned under the bed.
Max puts put the sticky object in his pocket.
Ruby cleaned the robots.
Max put put an egg in his pocket.
Max's popsicle was melting.
Max put put the popsicle stick and duck toy in his pocket.
Max put put a string in his pocket.
Ruby said, "Max! What's in your pocket?"
Max said, "Everything!"

Score: B-

Tips:

• Expand on the humor in Max’s actions and Ruby’s reactions to make the story more engaging.
• Consider adding more detail about how Max’s actions create chaos as Ruby tries to clean up.
• Ensure proper verb tense and article usage (e.g., "put a popsicle on his shoes" instead of "put popsicle on his shoes").
• Simplify and clarify sentences for better readability (e.g., "put an egg in his pocket" instead of "put egg in his pocket").
• Maintain consistency in describing Max’s actions for clearer communication (e.g., "put" instead of "puts").