Re: Max and Ruby-정하윤

[Teacher Winget]

The title of this book is “Grandma’s Berry Patch.”

Ruby and Max was were picking up some berrys berries.

But Max tries tried to eat berry the berries.

When Ruby picked up all the berrys berries, Max put the berrys berries into the toy and Mixed up! mixed them up!

Ruby was sad that Max all mixed up berrys had mixed up all the berries.

After Max mixed berrys mixed the berries, Grandma give it putting in the cup put them in a cup.

Grandma was to make smoothe made a smoothie.

I think Max is going to wanted to help Grandma.

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Score: B

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Tips):

1. 문법 및 표현 수정:

   • "Ruby and Max was picking up some berrys." → "Ruby and Max were picking up some berries." (주어가 복수이므로 was → were 변경 & berries 철자 수정)
   • "Max tries to eat berry." → "Max tried to eat the berries." (과거형 & 단수→복수 수정)
   • "Grandma was to make smoothe." → "Grandma made a smoothie." (더 자연스러운 표현으로 수정)

2. 내용 추가 추천:

   • Ruby는 어떤 느낌이었을까요? (예: "Ruby felt frustrated but..." 추가 가능)
   • Max는 정말 실수였을까요, 아니면 일부러 했을까요?