Re: 이상민

[Teacher1]

Caillou's mom carried clothes into Caillou's room.

Caillou rubbed his face.

Caillou needed more clothes, and he had an idea.

Caillou went to the restroom.

He tried to pick up clothes, but he was too short.

He tried to grab the clothes, but when he got out of the restroom, he accidentally closed the door too hard and got stuck.

Caillou shouted, "Dad, help!"

His dad helped him, picked him up, and they fixed the door together.

Score: C-

Tips)

1. 문법: "Caillou mom carries clothes in the caillou room" → "Caillou's mom carried clothes into Caillou's room." (Caillou mom 대신 Caillou’s mom, 그리고 carried가 맞아요.)
2. 문법: "Caillou have a great idea" → "Caillou had a great idea." (have 대신 과거형 had가 맞아요.)
3. 문법: "Caillou go to the restroom" → "Caillou went to the restroom." (go 대신 과거형 went가 맞아요.)
4. 문법: "he short he give the pick up clothes" → "he was too short. He tried to pick up the clothes." (he short 대신 he was too short, 그리고 문장을 자연스럽게 정리했어요.)
5. 문법: "he plug the door and caillou shout dad help" → "he accidentally closed the door too hard and got stuck. Caillou shouted, 'Dad, help!'" (plug the door은 자연스럽지 않아서 closed the door too hard and got stuck로 수정했어요.)
6. 내용: Caillou가 왜 옷을 찾고 있었는지, 그리고 아빠가 문을 어떻게 고쳤는지 더 설명하면 이야기가 더 좋아질 거예요! 😊

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