<p>The title of this story is <b>"Caillou Goes to Work."</b></p><p><s>The</s> <b>Caillou</b> goes with <b>his</b> mom to work.</p><p>He was amazed by the revolving door.</p><p>Me too, <b>I was also</b> amazed by the revolving door <s>at younger</s> <b>when I was younger</b>.</p><p><s>He to work, he's work is drawing paper.</s> → <b>At work, his job was drawing on paper.</b></p><p>He draws <b>his</b> family!</p><p>I think Caillou <s>draw</s> <b>draws</b> very well, <b>it’s a</b> beautiful drawing.</p><p>Caillou <s>lunch for with he's</s> <b>had lunch with his</b> mom. <b>It looked delicious.</b></p><p>Caillou's dad <s>was came</s> <b>came</b> to his mother's company.</p><p>Then Dad <s>with he goes to go</s> <b>went home with him</b>.</p><p>I <s>was go to visited my Dad company!</s> <b>went to visit my dad’s company!</b></p><p><b>Score: C+</b></p><p><b>Tips)</b></p><ul style="list-style-type: disc;" data-ke-list-type="disc"><li>"The Caillou"가 아니라 그냥 "Caillou"라고 해야 해요.</li><li>"he's"는 "he is"의 줄임말인데, "his"로 바꿔야 맞아요!</li><li>"draw" 대신 "draws"를 써야 해요. 현재형에서 주어가 "Caillou"일 때 동사는 "s"를 붙여야 해요.</li><li>"was came"은 틀린 표현이에요. "came"이 맞아요!</li><li>마지막 문장은 "I went to visit my dad’s company!"가 맞아요. "was go to"는 틀린 표현이에요.</li><li>문장이 더 자연스럽도록 조금 다듬으면 훨씬 좋아질 거예요! 😊</li></ul>
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