Re: Read it-Ronaldo

[Teacher Winget]

My Birthday in Germany

After I read this book, I learned that birthdays in Germany are very traditional.

In Germany, people eat their traditional foods and cake.

In Korea, people eat cake and birthday soup.

---

Score: B+

Tips for Improvement:

1. Sentence Structure & Clarity:

   • "the book is very traditional in Germany" → "I learned that birthdays in Germany are very traditional." (The book itself is not "traditional," but it describes traditions.)

2. Grammar & Word Choice:

   • "It is Germany's people eat" → "In Germany, people eat" (More natural phrasing.)
   • "Korean food is cake, and soup." → "In Korea, people eat cake and birthday soup." (Clearer and grammatically correct sentence.)