Re: 1A 216-Yulia

[Teacher2]

The title of this book is "Milly, Molly and Jimmy's Seeds". One day Jimmy wasn't in the classroom. Jimmy̶s̶'̶ Jimmy's friends were worried (about) him. Jimmy always had (ideas) about growing plants, because Jimmy loved growing plants and flowers. And h̶e̶ he always helped the gardener. But Jimmy wasn't in the classroom again and again. So Jimmy̶s̶'̶ Jimmy's friends were very very worried. In the morning, Miss Blythe said Jimmy died in the hospital in the night. They all cried a lot together. And they didn't fel̶t̶ feel good. They decided to decorate Jimmy's desk with a bunch of flowers. They were ready, (but) Jimmy's desk wasn't in the classroom now. They started to grow flower̶ flowers, the flower̶s̶ grew taller and taller. There i̶s̶ was a big sunflower with a happy face. They all were happy. Jimmy w̶a̶s̶ had come back (in spirit) to them.

Grade: A-

Tips)

1. 소유격 's는 이름 뒤에 바로 붙여주세요 (Jimmy's).
2. 과거시제로 통일해서 써주세요.
3. 불규칙 동사 'feel'의 과거형은 'felt'예요.
4. 해바라기가 어떻게 생겼는지 더 자세히 설명해보면 좋겠어요.
5. 친구들이 Jimmy를 기억하는 방법이 참 아름답네요.