Re: Max and Ruby - Jia

[Teacher Winget]

Today is the East Bunnyhop Summer Festival.

By chance, Max and Ruby met Louise at the festival.

There were many things to enjoy.

Max wanted to ride a rocket, but he was so small that he couldn't ride it.

But Max didn't give up. Max put cotton candy on his head and wore heels.

He even participated in a magic show and borrowed a magician's hat, and he disappeared.

But his tricks were captured by Ruby.

However, Mr. Piazza informed them that there was a rocket ride for those smaller than the line.

Finally, Max became a rocket racer.

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Score: B+

Tips)

1. "wear a hill" → "wore heels" ("hill"은 언덕, "heel"은 신발의 굽이지만, 여기서는 "heels"를 사용해야 해요.)
2. "candyfloss" → "cotton candy" (미국식 영어에서는 "cotton candy"가 더 일반적이에요.)
3. "participate at magic show" → "participated in a magic show" ("participate"는 보통 "in"과 함께 사용돼요.)
4. "his brutalities" → "his tricks" ("brutality"는 잔인함이라는 뜻이라 문맥에 맞지 않아요. 여기서는 "tricks"가 적절해요.)
5. "Plazza informed there is rocket" → "Mr. Piazza informed them that there was a rocket ride" (더 자연스럽게 수정했어요.)