[Corrected] The amount of money which I want to get

[Jim Lee]

Your writing	My corrections
I have studied Toeic for 1 years, but that is still difficult for me to get 900. I am eager to pass that point and I has studied Ear of the Toeic, Kim Daegun's book, and so on. Suddenly I tired of studying Toeic, so put away those books then watched the film of Saving private Ryan. I came to be interested in that movie after watching the picture of Taeguki. Whenever I see Saving private Ryan, I can feel different impression which bases on the realism of the battle. And it is so hard to hear the pronunciation prcisely. How much money would you want to get during your whole life? Watching the movie, I came up with that idea. It is so silly. What are you think now! The battle has nothing to do with the money ! After all, I came to the end that the significant thing is not the quantity. I'll do everything in my power the wait the fruit. Thank you very much to read my diary and correct it !	I have studied TOEICoeic for 1 years, but it that is still difficult for me to get a 900 score. I am eager to pass that point. and I haves studied with the Ear of the Toeic and, Kim Daegun's book, and so on. Suddenly I tam ired of studying for the Toeic, so I put away those books and started then watchinged the film of Saving private Ryan. I came to be interested in that movie after watching the picture of Taeguki. Whenever I see Saving pPrivate Ryan, I can feel the different impression which is baseds on the realism of the battle. And it is so hard to hear the pronunciation precisely. How much money would you want to get during your whole life? Watching the movie, I came up with that idea. It is so silly. What are you thinking of now! The battle has nothing to do with the money ! After all, I came to the conclusion end that the significant thing is not the quantity. I'll do everything in my power the wait the fruit. ?? Thank you very much for to reading my diary and correcting it !
Comment: Good!  Personal Comment: It is a good idea to change your way of studying to keep you interested.  Also, it is important to keep up your English studies….and that will in fact help you with your toeic grade.