Re: Caillou오현우

[Teacher1]

Caillou found a cute dog while playing ball with his dad.
And some grandmother a grandmother, the dog's owner, suggested to him if he would walk the dog to walk the dog.
He accepted.

She threw the ball to him and told him "fetch," and he would bring he brought the ball back.
He played with the little dog in the park in the afternoon, and after he came home he went home.

He suggested getting a little dog.
But his dad says that we said they already have Gilbert,
and that he will think about it when you he and Rosie grow up.

The next morning, he took the dog doll out of his toy box,
showed it to his parents, and then he walks walked with it every day.

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Score: Ao

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Tips)

• 문법: 이야기니까 says → said, would bring → brought, walks → walked처럼 과거형을 써야 해요.

• 표현 다듬기: “some grandmother”보다는 → a grandmother, “you and Rosie”는 → he and Rosie로 고쳐야 문맥이 자연스러워요.

• 이야기 구성: 강아지를 키우고 싶은 Caillou의 마음이 잘 드러났고, 장난감 강아지와 걷는 모습이 귀엽게 마무리됐어요! 🐶✨

T. Monica 현우가 이거 니가 쓴거 아닌거 같아.