Re: Read it:Austin

[Teacher Winget]

I will introduce Max and Ruby today, and episode 1 of this story is "Max's Chocolate Chicken." Start!!

When Max and Ruby saw the Easter Bunny hide its eggs because it was Easter, they decided to find them. While Ruby found all the pretty eggs, Max collected the acorns hard was busy collecting acorns. But Max hid the chocolate chicken and ate it in one bite without Ruby knowing. The Easter Bunny tried to give three another chocolate chicken to Ruby, but Max broke it.

Score: B

Tips:

1. 'Kangaroo'는 'Easter Bunny'로 수정해야 해요, 부활절이 배경이니까요.
2. 'collected the acorns hard' 대신 'was busy collecting acorns'가 더 자연스러워요.
3. 'three chocolate chicken' 대신 'another chocolate chicken'이 더 적절해요.