Re: Why you need to sleep :Jackson

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Sleep is important because your brain and body both need sleep to healthy be healthy.

First, your body has to rest. Because Sleep also helps your hair, bones, and skin grow. If you hurt are hurt, sleep makes heal helps you heal faster.

Sleep is also important for your brain. Because It helps focus you focus and remember any thing anything.
And sleep tight tonight and stay healthy. So sleep well tonight and stay healthy!

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Score: A-

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Tips)

• "to healthy"는 "to be healthy"처럼 **동사(be)**가 필요해요.

• "Because"로 문장을 시작할 때는 그 앞 문장과 연결되도록 써야 해요. 따로 쓰면 어색해요.

• "hurt"는 다쳤다는 뜻인데, "If you hurt"보다는 **"If you are hurt"**가 자연스러워요.

• "makes heal"보다는 **"helps you heal"**이 맞아요.

• "any thing"은 **"anything"**이 맞는 철자예요.

• 마지막 문장은 긍정적 마무리로 고치면 더 좋고 자연스러워요.