Re: Read it!-steven

[Teacher1]

The Journey of three plastic bottles One day, the bottles side and side sat side by side on the shelf. First, one young boy purchase purchased the bottle. Bottle was exited The bottle was excited. Boy drank water and put on put it in the trash can. It was go went to landfill for a long time. Second bottle was parchased purchased by man. The man drank water and throw threw it to the river. Then, even up eventually the bottle go went to the ocean. It will be hurt hurt sea animals. Last, third plastic bottle was parchased purchased by young girl. Young girl put it on in the recycle bin. And it made from was made into new product. I think when I read this book, I will put bottle bottles on in the recycle bin.

Score: B+

Tips)

1. 문장을 시작할 때는 'The'나 'A'를 잊지 마세요.
2. 과거시제를 쓸 때는 동사 뒤에 '-ed'를 붙이는 것을 기억하세요.
3. 물건을 '안에' 넣을 때는 'in'을 사용해요.
4. 이야기가 더 재미있어지려면 병들의 감정을 더 자세히 써보면 어떨까요? (예: 슬펐어요, 기뻤어요)
5. 바다 동물들이 어떻게 다칠 수 있는지 예시를 들어보면 좋겠어요.