Re: 2A 206-David

[Teacher1]

The title of this book is Benjamin Barnes Goes to school School Benjamin Barnes crawled out from under he his soft blue quit quilt something Something was different Benjamin looked around his room Mrs. Mrs. Barnes was already in the kitchen fixing breakfast and she told Benjamin, "You don't want to late be late on the first day of school~~?~~ " Benjamin was excited but his stomach felt so funny that he could hardly eat his cereal and Then Benjamin was almost there Mrs. Mrs. Alter is was Ben's teacher standing and smiling in the hall outside the kindergarten room and Mrs. alter Alter's teacher is very kind and The children asks asked "is Is it a mouse?" And Later, moms comming moms were coming and teacher says said "mom Mom" Benjamin didn't want to stay but now is he has friends I think this book is interesting

Score: B

Tips)

1. 문장을 시작할 때는 첫 글자를 대문자로 써야 해요.
2. 문장과 문장 사이에 'and'를 너무 많이 쓰지 않도록 해요.
3. 이야기가 과거에 일어났으므로 과거형으로 써야 해요.
4. Benjamin이 어떤 친구들을 사귀었는지 써보면 좋겠어요.
5. Benjamin의 배가 왜 이상했는지 자세히 설명해보면 더 재미있을 것 같아요.