<p class="0" style="letter-spacing: 0pt; mso-pagination: none; mso-padding-alt: 0pt 0pt 0pt 0pt; mso-font-width: 100%; mso-text-raise: 0pt;"><span style="letter-spacing: 0pt; font-family: 함초롬바탕; font-size: 12pt; mso-font-width: 100%; mso-text-raise: 0pt;"><span style="letter-spacing: 0pt; font-family: 함초롬바탕; mso-font-width: 100%; mso-text-raise: 0pt;"> <span style="font-size: 12pt;">My dream bedroom.</span></span></span></p><p class="0" style="letter-spacing: 0pt; mso-pagination: none; mso-padding-alt: 0pt 0pt 0pt 0pt; mso-font-width: 100%; mso-text-raise: 0pt;"></p><span style="letter-spacing: 0pt; font-family: 함초롬바탕; font-size: 12pt; mso-font-width: 100%; mso-text-raise: 0pt;"><p class="0" style="letter-spacing: 0pt; mso-pagination: none; mso-padding-alt: 0pt 0pt 0pt 0pt; mso-font-width: 100%; mso-text-raise: 0pt;"><span style="font-family: 함초롬바탕; font-size: 12pt;"> </span></p><p class="0" style="letter-spacing: 0pt; mso-pagination: none; mso-padding-alt: 0pt 0pt 0pt 0pt; mso-font-width: 100%; mso-text-raise: 0pt;"><span style="letter-spacing: 0pt; font-family: 함초롬바탕; font-size: 12pt; mso-font-width: 100%; mso-text-raise: 0pt;"><br></span></p><p class="0" style="letter-spacing: 0pt; mso-pagination: none; mso-padding-alt: 0pt 0pt 0pt 0pt; mso-font-width: 100%; mso-text-raise: 0pt;"><span style="letter-spacing: 0pt; font-family: 함초롬바탕; font-size: 12pt; mso-font-width: 100%; mso-text-raise: 0pt;"> My dream bedroom is simple.</span> If I live alone, I want to decorate it like this way.<span style="letter-spacing: 0pt; font-size: 12pt;"> </span><span style="letter-spacing: 0pt; font-size: 12pt;">The wallpaper is made up of white and blue colors. On the left side of the door, there are books and laptops on the desk and usually spend time in front of the desk. I also have a bookcase behind the desk, and there are several genres of books such as fiction books and comic books. I'm sleeping on the topper instead of the bed between the desk and the bookcase. It is very soft, and I usually lie down and use my cell phone or watch movies. (105 words)</span></p></span><span style="letter-spacing: 0pt; font-family: 함초롬바탕; font-size: 12pt; mso-font-width: 100%; mso-text-raise: 0pt;"><p class="0" style="letter-spacing: 0pt; mso-pagination: none; mso-padding-alt: 0pt 0pt 0pt 0pt; mso-font-width: 100%; mso-text-raise: 0pt;"><br></p></span><p class="0" style="letter-spacing: 0pt; mso-pagination: none; mso-padding-alt: 0pt 0pt 0pt 0pt; mso-font-width: 100%; mso-text-raise: 0pt;"><br></p>
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첫댓글 전체 내용이 my dream bedroom인것 같다. 그럼
1. 제목 변경
2. 마지막 문장처럼 첫문장 만들것. 지금 첫문장 삭제.
3. 문장구조 다양화할 것. there is/are, I have, 가구 is/are 등으로.
하나씩 바꿔볼래, 관형!
수정했습니다.!
@박관형 잘했다.
마저 해보자.
1. 마지막 문장 뒤: if I live alone, I want to decorate it like this way. 를 첫문장 뒤로 이동.
2. 첫문장: My dream bedroom으로 수정
일단 이렇게 수정해볼래.
@Mi Kyong Kim 수정 했습니다.!
@박관형 좋아!
좀더 해보자.
1. 두번째 문장: 대문자로 시작할 것.
2. signal 모두 삭제 (first, second 등)
3. 가구 순서는 왼쪽에서 오른쪽 이런 식으로 정한 후, 하나씩 재배치 하렴.
수정해볼래. 거의 다 왔다.
@Mi Kyong Kim 수정 했습니다. 검토 부탁 드립니다.!