Re: Max and Ruby-Grace

[Teacher Winget]

One special day, Ruby and Louise made a gingerbread house for their grandmother.
They started to make it, but Max continued to interrupt with some jelly, which was very sticky.

So Ruby didn't hate get angry at them.
While they was were trying to attach the pillar, Max played with his toys.

However, that didn't attach well.
The flour was disappeared more and more flour kept disappearing, and Ruby was getting disappointed.

By the way Surprisingly, the jelly that Ruby and Louise hated didn't like was helpful to them.
Max decorated with the jelly.

At last, they could make a wonderful house, and their grandmother was proud of them.

I always wondered about Louise and grandmother's realization feelings.

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Score: B+

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Tips)

• “they was”는 틀렸어요. “they were”가 맞아요.

• “hate them”은 말이 안 맞아요. “get angry at them” 또는 “didn’t get mad”가 더 맞아요.

• “was disappeared”는 자연스럽지 않아요. “kept disappearing”이라고 하면 돼요.

• “realization”보다는 “feelings” 또는 “thoughts”가 여기에서는 더 알맞아요.

• Max가 어떻게 도와줬는지 자세히 써 보면 좋아요.

• 할머니가 집을 봤을 때 어떤 표정을 지었는지도 써 보세요.