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첫번째 글Who influenced me in my childhood? Most people grow up under the influence of their surroundings in childhood, which affects their personalities. Likewise, my personality changed a lot as I grew up under the influence of my surroundings. The place where I was most affected by my parents. When I was young, there were many times when I helped others even if I was damaged, and there were many times when others were more priority than me. Seeing this, my parents always told me to take care of myself first, and now I have changed to a personality that puts myself first and always puts myself first. While attending school, my personality changed a lot, and my personality changed a lot while I was in high school. My high school had a night self-study until 10 p.m. after class. Originally, my personality liked to be alone and was very introverted, but I gradually liked to be with my friends while going to school, and my personality changed a lot to the extent that I could talk comfortably with people I met for the first time. A man cannot stay home all the time. Inevitably, there are several meetings, and many new people are met and influenced. At the same time, my personality changes. 피드백1(김보경) : 글의 형식에 잘 맞추어 자신이 영향을 받고 바뀌게 된 계기를 잘 썼지만, 마지막 결론 마무리하는 부분 내용을 더 추가해 작성하면 좋을 것 같습니다.피드백2(김준석) : 자신의 성격이 변하게 된 것을 환경과 사람으로 나누어서 쓴 것이 좋았고, 두번째 문단에서 예시나 사례를 들어서 더 설명해주면 좋을 것 같습니다.  두번째 글 What influenced in my childhood? Most people grow up under the influence of their surroundings in childhood, which affects their personality. Likewise, my personality has changed a lot due to the influence of the surrounding environment.  I was influenced by my parents the most. When I was young, there were many times when I helped others even if I was damaged, and there were many times when other people came first than me. After seeing this, my parents always told me to take care of myself first, and now I think about myself first and help others after finishing my work.  While attending school, my personality changed a lot, especially my personality changed the most when I went to high school. Our high school had a night study until 10 p.m. after class. Originally, my personality liked to be alone and was introverted, but as I went to school, I gradually liked to be with my friends, and my personality changed so much that I could talk comfortably with people I met for the first time. I think the best way to show this is that my MBTI has changed. My previous MBTI was INFP. It can be summarized that INFP is an emotional personality that likes to be alone. And now that my personality has changed to ENTP. ENTP can be summed up as a person who likes to socialize and is a rational personality. If I tell my friends that my personality has changed like this, all of them don't believe me. That's how much the school completely changed my personality.  Finally, through self-reflection, my personality could change even a little. I know my favorite outer and inner side in detail. And I try to apply it to myself and practice it. As I enter university, I meet and communicate with more people and sometimes say the opposite about this. Every day, I spend 30 minutes to an hour looking back on my day before going to bed, reflecting on these things and thinking about what to do next. In the meantime, my personality has changed little by little, and I can feel the changes when I compare the beginning of admission and now. For example, excessive use of slang or small talk behind the scenes. Although it has not been completely corrected yet, I will continue to do this self-reflection and gradually change my personality.   My introverted and timid personality was changed into an extroverted and active personality in various situations. It is not common for people to live with one personality from birth to death. Most of them are placed in various situations in their lives, and their personalities can change in these situations. The same goes for me, and my personality may change further in the future. 피드백1(김보경) : 결론부분을 더 추가해 작성하였고 빨간색으로 강조하였습니다.피드백2(김준석) : 두번째문단(본론)부분의 예시와 사례를 추가하였고, 파란색으로 강조하였습니다.