Re: Max and Ruby (Olivia)

[Teacher Winget]

The title of this episode is "Ruby's Hiccups."
I will summarize the Max and Ruby story. Ruby and Louise were practicing songs for the concert. Max asked Ruby to find the monster mask, but Ruby did started hiccuping. So, Louise found four ways to cure hiccups. First, Ruby held her breath for as long as she could, but it didn't work. Second, Ruby hung upside down, but it didn't didn't work either.
Third, Ruby drank a glass of water all at once, but it also didn't work. Finally, there was a way to scare them away scare the hiccups away. Then, grandmother came wearing a monster mask, and Ruby's hiccups stopped.
I want to know other ways to stop hiccups.

Score: A-

Tips:

1. 'Did hiccups' 대신 'started hiccuping'으로 고치는 것이 더 자연스러워요.
2. 'Didn't work too'보다는 'didn't work either'로 고치는 것이 더 맞는 표현이에요.
3. 'Scare them away'는 누구를 놀래킨다는 의미로 들릴 수 있으니, 'scare the hiccups away'로 고쳐서 Ruby의 딸꾹질을 없애려는 시도로 표현하는 게 좋아요.
4. "I want to know other ways to stop hiccups"는 귀여운 마무리로, 더 구체적인 방법을 추가해서 글을 확장할 수 있어요. 예를 들어, 물을 마시는 방법 외에도 친구들에게 물어보는 장면을 추가할 수 있습니다.