Re: 1c 62 youl

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Helen Keller has a deef and blind was deaf and blind.
설명: deef → deaf 철자 수정. 또 has 대신 was를 사용해요. 그리고 blind 앞에 and를 넣어 두 가지 상태를 연결했어요.

She was age at six she learned was six years old when she learned how to say over sixty . words.
설명: age at six → six years old, 문장이 이어지도록 when을 넣었어요. words를 넣어 의미를 완성했어요.

Her mother was very proud.

One day she looked locked her mom in a copboard cupboard.
설명: looked → locked (의미 수정), copboard → cupboard 철자 수정.

People called her a wild child.
설명: a를 넣어 자연스러운 문장이 되었어요.

Helen's mom worried about her terrible temper tantrums.

Her teacher taught Hellen Helen how to spell W-A-T-E-R by speling spelling the word into her hand.
설명: Hellen → Helen 철자 수정, speling → spelling 철자 수정. into her hand가 자연스러운 표현이에요.

She became one of the most admired people in the world.

I think this story is fun.

Score: Bo

Tips)
헬렌 켈러 이야기를 잘 썼어요.
글을 더 좋게 하려면 헬렌이 어떻게 배우기 시작했는지 한 문장을 더 써 보세요.
예) Her teacher helped her understand words with water.
또 deaf, every, spelling 같은 단어 철자를 한 번 더 확인하면 좋아요.