Re: max ad ruby (steven)

[Teacher Winget]

One day, Ruby was making making a Valentine. Max wanted to make a Valentine too, but scissors is were dangerous for Max, so Ruby didn't gave give him the scissors. Max wanted to make a Valentine again, so Ruby concented consented, but still no scissors. Max can made could make a Valentine for Grandma. Max wanted to use glue, but it was too messy for him. Then Ruby be ugly valentain we've made tothe took the Valentine they made to the mailbox. Next, Ruby will make candy Valentines. Max wanted to make a Valentine, but Ruby froce forced Max to send it to the mailbox. Max and Ruby gave the Valentine to Grandma. I think this book is fun.

Score: B-

Tips:

• 'making a valentain'는 'making a Valentine'로 수정해야 해요.
• 'is'는 'were'로, 'gave'는 'give'로 수정해야 해요, 문법적으로 맞는 표현이에요.
• 'concented'는 'consented'로 고쳐야 해요, 올바른 단어 선택입니다.
• 'can made'는 'could make'로 바꾸는 게 맞아요.
• 'be ugly valentain' 부분은 'took the Valentine they made to the mailbox'로 수정해야 자연스러워요.
• 'froce'는 'forced'로 고쳐야 해요.