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good job, boy! 다만 we took some bread to eat and took a bottle of water to drink. 는 문법적으로 맞지만 took을 반복해서 말하지 않고. 일반적으로, we took some bread and a bottle of water. 정도로.. 또 We planned to see Chok Sung Roo and then ,to see a musical THE LAST EMPRESS.도 문법적으로는 맞지만, to see.를 반복하지는 않고, we planned to see ~ and a ~. 로 간단히... 그리고 we traveled to the castle by a very scenic route. => 이게 맞는 표현인지 확실치 않네요. 사전에서 travel의 용법을 찾아봐야 할 듯.. 일반적으로 제가 본 표현은, we had a journey(or a trip) to the castle along the beautiful road. 또. but ,we revered students ticket,so we looks like students . 라는 문장은 해석을 하면, 그러나 우리는 학생 티켓을 존경했기 때문에(?), 그래서 우리는 학생들 처럼 보인다.. 라는 말이 됩니다... 뭔 말이냐구요? 저도 모르죠.. 약간의 오타와 시제 실수, 그리고 접속사 충돌인데요 보다 매끄럽게 고치면.. we had to try(or have a trial) to look like students because we had gotten tickets for students. 그리고 the porblem was to me.는.. 좀 아닌 것 같거든요 however it was so hard to me. 정도? my friend was not problem 은 my friend was no matter. 정도? 아니면 가장 정확한 것은.. my friend's trial was so successful because she looked young. 그 다음에는 For instance, on children day getting on the taxi with her grandmother, the driver said to her " hi, a kid!, are you going on a picnic with your grandmother!" anyway, we encouraged each other to enter the hall with beating hearts. ~~~~ (생략) and the men wearing black suits were checking the ticket. fortunately,we was able to pass and seat on the best place. the musical was very wonderful, so we was impressed. after the musical, we had a delicious dinner. and then we went to home by bus we really enjoyed our trip. --------------------- [원본 메세지] --------------------- 지난 여름방학때 나는 내 친구와 진주에 여행을 갔다 . The last summer vacation,I went on a trip to jin-ju with my friend. 우리는 아침일찍 출발했다 늦기전에 집에 돌아와야 했기 때문이다. We started early .because we had to come back home not too late. 우리는 우리가 먹을 약간의 빵과 물을 가져갔다 We took some bread to eat and took a bottle of water to drink. 우리는 촉석루와 뮤지컬 명성황후를 보기로 했다 We planned to see Chok Sung Roo and then ,to see a musical THE LAST EMPRESS. 촉석루는 진주를 방문하는 사람들이 많이 가는곳이다 촉석루 is a major attraction for people visiting the jin-su. 우리는 아름다운풍경의 길을 따라 성을 여행했다 we traveled to the castle by a very scenic route. 풍경이 매우 아름다웠다 the landscape was very beautiful . 점심을먹은후에 우리는 진주 문화예술회으로 갔다 After the lunch ,we went to the jin-ju culture hall. 우리는 이미 티켓을 예약해 놓았다 . we already reserved musical ticket. 그런데 학생표를 끊었기 때문에 학생처럼 보여야 했다 but ,we revered students ticket,so we looks like students . 문제는 나였다 ,the porblem was to me. 내친구는 문제가 되지 았았다 . my friend was not problem 그녀는 어려보였기 때문이다. she looks very young 어린이날 그녀가 할머니와 함께 어딘가를가기위해 택시를 탔다 . children day,she got on the taxi with her grandmother to go to somewhere 그러자 기사아저씨는 그녀에게 "꼬마야 어린이날이라서 할머니랑 놀러가는구나 " 라고 말할정도로 그녀는 어려보였다 so,the driver said to her" oh ! baby you are go on a picnic. 우리는 떨렸지만 용기를 내어 갔다 we trembled .but we encouraged each other 예술회관에는 관람을 하기위해 온 많은 사람들이 있었다 there were many people to see a musical . 그리고 검은 양복을 입은 남자들이 표 검사를 하고 있었다 and the man ware the black suits was checked the ticket. 다행히 우리는 무사히 통과를 했고 제일 좋은 자리를 찾아서 앉았다 fortunately,we passed safetely. seated the vest place. 뮤지컬은 아주 멋있었다 .우리는 깊은 감명을 받았다 the musical was very wonderful,we so empressed. 공연이 끝난후 우리는 맛있는 저녁을 먹었다 . after finished the musical ,we had a delicious dinner. 우리는 버스를 타고 집으로 향했다 ,즐거운 여행이었다 we went to home by bus,we enjoyed our trip * 꼬랑지말 * 너무 길어서 읽기 지루하셨죠? 아앙~ 저 이거 목욜까지 제출 해야하니까 꼭 좀 봐서 수정해 주세염~*^^*