Re:Re:영작 올립니다, 수정 및 첨삭 부탁드립니다(첨삭완료)

회원님이 쓰신 문장을 바탕으로  문법적으로 잘못된 부분이나 어색한 표현들을 수정하였습니다. 한글문장과 영어문장은 구조적으로 많이 다르기 때문에 한글로 쓰셔서 영어로 다시 만들기 보다는  처음부터 영어문장으로 써보시기를 권합니다. 지원 잘 하시고 좋은 결과 있길 바랍니다 나중에 또 신청해주시고  주변에 영어연수가 필요하신 분들에게 저희 어학원 홍보해주시면 감사하겠습니다. Introduction of one’s self                     Growth Background     My hometown is Daegu city. My family members are my parents and younger brother. After I graduated from high school, I started my single life in Seoul. During university years, I learned a lot of the things about life and work at school and work field. In school, I was been chosen as public relations assistant, school-webzine editor and a model in our school news paper. I worked at ceremonial events, such as college fairs, and school assistant. My double majors are costume design and Korean literature. I could get the joy of creation in my majors but I chose service work for my future plan because I am so happy when I work at the service industry.  My hobby was traveling, so I traveled all over the world by self-earned money  It helped me to learn how to mingle with people of the different cultures.        Strengths and Values     My personality is bright and cheerful. I am positive and humorous person. Some friends call me human vitamin. I am working at exhibition and convention field as an interpreter and emcee for 8 years. I met various people through my work, and I learned how to handle complaints from customers. My service skill could make my customers happy. It was my joy of work. I love to mingle with people, and make friends easily. I am a team player. When I feel depressed or in difficulty, I always remember this sentence."When God closes the door, he always opens another door for us" I try to find the positive side of a bad situation. I also think that hard experience can be a good teacher of my life. It makes me keep positive mind.        Education and Experience Overseas     In 2007, I got a working holiday visa for a year to learn Japanese. I lived in Tokyo, and gained various service experiences.  I was a hall staff of restaurant and room maid of the hotel. I learned about world-class manners, cleanliness and service skill through my work.  In addition, I realized the importance of team work. I went to Sri Lanka in 2010. I joined the internship program of HONORS CLUB INTERNATIONAL Academy Hotel Management and Hospitality services. I have learned the basics of service utility through this program.  At that time, most of the customers are Europeans and co-workers are Srilankans. I had gained communication skills and international sense at workplace training.  I worked as a waitress in hotel, in the food and beverage area.       Motive for Application and Ambition     My dream is to become a specialist of the service field. I want to be a professional service provider in flight. In addition, after getting careers as a member of the cabin crew, my dream is to become a cabin crew instructor. Not only someone who teaches and trains, but also wants to be a friendly helper to those who have the same dream like mine. I accumulated useful knowledge and skills while working in various service fields. I have built my life to become a flight attendant. I will demonstrate my abilities to travelers and provide them safe and comfortable trip. People think an eagle is just one of the strong birds. But I have another idea about the eagle. Hawk Eye, this word means strictly looking true and face up to reality. I think a crew of Eagle Express must have that for safe riding. The duty of a cabin crew is similar to the mother eagle. She cares for her family and keeps the happy flight.  I want to provide everyone safety aboard the aircraft with gives comfort until they reach their destination. I want to be a member of the Eagle Express. I read some article about the Eagle Express. It was an interview with President Lee. I can see the great future of the Eagle Express airline. If I can be a part of the Eagle Express, it will be an honor for me to take the first step to a successful flight. 필리핀 여러분 선교센터 어학원