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<td width=291 valign=top class="Normal"> <p style='line-height:14.0pt;'><span
style='font-size:11.0pt;font-family:Arial;
color:black'>Yesterday, My sister's family was invited my home. <br>
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My older sister and mother went shopping to department store, While they were shopping,I took care of my nieces. <br>
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I have two nieces, their name is sujung & suyoung. They're lovely kids <br>
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We went the elementary school ground near my home. <br>
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And I carefully watched nieces who riding a swing and playing a seesaw and haning a iron bar and slipping <br>
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I much took a picture of them because their looks was very qute and lovely <br>
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And then, We ate out for a cold noodle</span></p></td>
<td width=291 valign=top class="Normal"> <p style='line-height:14.0pt;'><span
style='font-size:11.0pt;font-family:Arial;
color:black'>Yesterday, <span class=msoDel><del cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee"
datetime="2004-05-28T16:55">M</del></span><span class=msoIns><ins
cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee" datetime="2004-05-28T16:55">m</ins></span>y sister's family <span class=msoIns><ins cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee"
datetime="2004-05-28T16:55">came to </ins></span><span class=msoDel><del
cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee" datetime="2004-05-28T16:55">was invited</del></span> my ho<span class=msoIns><ins cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee"
datetime="2004-05-28T16:55">use</ins></span><span class=msoDel><del
cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee" datetime="2004-05-28T16:55">me</del></span>. <br>
<br>
My older sister and mother went shopping to <span class=msoIns><ins
cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee" datetime="2004-05-28T16:56">a </ins></span>department store<span class=msoIns><ins cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee"
datetime="2004-05-28T16:56">.</ins></span><span class=msoDel><del
cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee" datetime="2004-05-28T16:56">,</del></span> While they were shopping,<span class=msoIns><ins cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee"
datetime="2004-05-28T16:56"> </ins></span>I took care of my nieces. <br>
<br>
I have two nieces<span class=msoDel><del cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee"
datetime="2004-05-28T16:56">,</del></span> <span class=msoIns><ins
cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee" datetime="2004-05-28T16:56">and </ins></span>their name<span class=msoIns><ins cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee"
datetime="2004-05-28T16:56">s</ins></span> <span class=msoDel><del
cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee" datetime="2004-05-28T16:56">is</del></span> <span
class=msoIns><ins cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee" datetime="2004-05-28T16:56">are </ins></span><span
class=msoDel><del cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee" datetime="2004-05-28T16:56">s</del></span><span
class=msoIns><ins cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee" datetime="2004-05-28T16:56">S</ins></span>ujung & <span class=msoDel><del cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee"
datetime="2004-05-28T16:56">s</del></span><span class=msoIns><ins
cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee" datetime="2004-05-28T16:56">S</ins></span>uyoung. They're lovely kids<span class=msoIns><ins cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee"
datetime="2004-05-28T16:56">.</ins></span> <br>
<br>
We went <span class=msoIns><ins cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee"
datetime="2004-05-28T16:56">to an </ins></span><span class=msoDel><del
cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee" datetime="2004-05-28T16:56">the</del></span> elementary school ground near my home. <br>
<br>
<span class=msoDel><del cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee" datetime="2004-05-28T16:56">And </del></span>I carefully watched <span class=msoIns><ins cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee"
datetime="2004-05-28T16:56">my </ins></span>nieces who <span class=msoIns><ins
cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee" datetime="2004-05-28T16:56">were </ins></span>riding a swing and playing <span class=msoIns><ins cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee"
datetime="2004-05-28T16:57">on </ins></span>a seesaw and han<span
class=msoIns><ins cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee" datetime="2004-05-28T17:05">g</ins></span>ing <span class=msoIns><ins cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee" datetime="2004-05-28T17:05">off </ins></span>a<span class=msoIns><ins cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee"
datetime="2004-05-28T17:05">n</ins></span> iron bar and slipping<span
class=msoIns><ins cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee" datetime="2004-05-28T17:05">.</ins></span><span
class=msoDel><del cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee" datetime="2004-05-28T17:05"> </del></span><br>
<br>
I <span class=msoDel><del cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee" datetime="2004-05-28T17:06">much</del></span> took <span class=msoDel><del cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee"
datetime="2004-05-28T17:06">a</del></span> <span class=msoIns><ins
cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee" datetime="2004-05-28T17:06">many </ins></span>picture<span
class=msoIns><ins cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee" datetime="2004-05-28T17:06">s</ins></span> of them because <span class=msoIns><ins cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee"
datetime="2004-05-28T17:06">they looked so cute </ins></span><span
class=msoDel><del cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee" datetime="2004-05-28T17:06">their looks was very qut</del></span>e and lovely<span class=msoIns><ins
cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee" datetime="2004-05-28T17:06">.</ins></span> <br>
<br>
And then, <span class=msoDel><del cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee"
datetime="2004-05-28T17:06">W</del></span><span class=msoIns><ins
cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee" datetime="2004-05-28T17:06">w</ins></span>e ate<span
class=msoDel><del cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee" datetime="2004-05-28T17:06"> out for a</del></span> cold noodle<span class=msoIns><ins cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee"
datetime="2004-05-28T17:06">s.</ins></span></span></p></td>
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style='font-size:11.0pt;font-family:Arial'>Comment:</span></b><span
style='font-size:11.0pt;font-family:Arial'> Great writing! </span></p>
<p style='line-height:14.0pt;'><b><span
style='font-size:11.0pt;font-family:Arial'>Personal Comment:</span></b><span style='font-size:11.0pt; font-family:Arial'> It must be nice having cute nieces. :-)</span></p></td>
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