Re: 이상민

[Teacher1]

Caillou plays was playing catch with his dad.

He discovers grandmother poppy he pats his head
→ saw a grandmother named Poppy and she patted his head.

She suggestions at his hello
→ said, "Hello Caillou, can you follow me for walk my dog
→ come with me to walk my dog?"

He look at his dad looked at his dad.

Dad said, "Okay!"
Caillou shouted, "Yipeeee!"

Caillou walked around with her dog and he go to the park
→ went to the park.

She expression‎ play with my dog
→ said, "Play with my dog!"
"Throw this ball, and the dog will catch it and bring it back."
"Could you try it?"

"Yes!" Caillou said.
Caillou threw the ball.
The dog brought the ball back.

Caillou very interesting → was very interested and excited.

Caillou made many memories with the dog.

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Score: C+

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Tips)

• 동사 과거형: plays → was playing, go → went, look → looked처럼 이야기에는 과거형을 써야 해요.

• 표현 정리: “suggestions at his hello”는 → **said, "Hello"**가 더 자연스러워요.

• 문장 마무리: 마지막에 "with" 뒤에 빠진 부분을 → **"with the dog."**으로 완성해줘야 해요.

이야기에서 Caillou가 강아지를 산책시키고 놀면서 즐거운 기억을 만드는 모습이 귀엽게 잘 표현됐어요! 다음에는 문장을 좀 더 천천히 쓰면서 정리해보면 더 멋질 거예요 😊🐶✨