Re: 1C 63 summary charlotte 내용추가

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In small a small house lived in lived named mei a girl named Mei with her parents.
설명: a small house처럼 a가 필요해요. Mei는 이름이라서 대문자로 써요.

Mei's favorite flowers were the plum blossom blossoms.
설명: 여러 꽃을 말할 때는 **blossoms (복수형)**을 써요.

When the summer rain came, the garden was green with leafs leaves.
설명: leaf → leaves가 올바른 복수형이에요.

One year's One year, Mei got sick while gathering plum leaves in the cold autumn breeze.
설명: One year라고 써요. year's는 여기서 사용하지 않아요.

One night, October. Mei died.
설명: **One night in October, Mei died.**처럼 쓰면 더 자연스러워요.

Her parents were heartbroken.

There Their dream, Mei came came back.
설명: **Their(그들의)**를 써야 해요. 꿈 이야기라서 came back이라고 쓰면 더 자연스러워요.

Score: B+

Tips)
이야기의 흐름이 잘 보여요.
마지막에 꿈에서 Mei가 무엇을 했는지 한 문장 더 쓰면 이야기가 더 재미있어져요.