Re: Max and Ruby Si Yoon

[Teacher1]

1. The title of this book is "Ruby's Safari".

Ruby was waiting for her friend Louise. But Max felt like to playing with toys wanted to play with his toys.

When Louise came to their house, Ruby and Louise went to the yard to observe the interesting creature interesting creatures.

When Ruby and Louise tried to find animals, Max pranked them with his animal toys. He left footprints with parrot toys and played tricks on them with spider toys, etc.

But when he was playing with his red toy, a real hummingbird was sitting on it landed on it.

Thanks to his prank, Ruby and Louise were able to get a badge. And Max was proud of it.

Score: A-

Tips)

1. "felt like to playing with toys"는 "wanted to play with his toys"로 수정하여 문법을 고쳤습니다.
   (Revised "felt like to playing with toys" to "wanted to play with his toys" for proper grammar.)
2. "the interesting creature"는 "interesting creatures"로 수정하여 문맥에 맞게 했습니다.
   (Changed "the interesting creature" to "interesting creatures" for context.)
3. "was sitting on it"는 "landed on it"으로 더 자연스러운 표현으로 고쳤습니다.
   (Replaced "was sitting on it" with "landed on it" for smoother phrasing.)
4. Max의 장난이 Ruby와 Louise의 목표를 어떻게 도왔는지 좀 더 자세히 묘사하면 이야기가 풍부해질 수 있습니다.
   (Adding more detail about how Max’s pranks helped Ruby and Louise achieve their goal could make the story more engaging.)