Re: Max and Ruby (Austin)

[Teacher Winget]

Ruby was preparing a tea party by herself, so Ruby asked Max for help, but Max was playing a pirate game. Ruby used wanted to use the tablecloth, but Max used it for his pirate game instead. Max got in the way of speed slowed things down, so Ruby used her head and asked Max to find the necklace. When Max found it, he was invited to the tea party. The first episode is finished, so I will introduce the second story. 

Score: B+

Tips)

1. 문법: "used" 대신 "wanted to use"라고 해야 문맥이 더 자연스러워요, 그리고 "got in the way of speed" 대신 "slowed things down"이라고 해야 해요.
2. 내용 추가: "왜 Ruby가 Max에게 목걸이를 찾는 일을 부탁했는지 더 설명할 수 있어요. 아마도 Max가 보물을 찾는 데 더 능숙했기 때문일 거예요!"