Re: Max and Rudy Jin woong

[Teacher1]

The title of this story is Ruby’s Safari.

Max was playing with a crocodile toy. Louise arrived at Ruby's house, and Ruby said she wouldn't get a badge unless she finished the Screbbook scrapbook.

Ruby and Louise went to the end of the Screbbook complete the scrapbook. Louise was searching with binoculars when Max surprised her with a crocodile toy.

Ruby told Max not to play around. Then, when there was a strange sound, they went to check it out. But it was just the sound from Max's toy.

They told her him to take the toy back so they could take a picture.

After that, Max kept playing with the toy. While Ruby was talking with him, a hummingbird appeared, and they took a picture.

Score: A-

Tips)

1. "Screbbook"는 "scrapbook"으로 철자 오류를 수정했습니다.
   (Corrected "Screbbook" to "scrapbook.")
2. "went to the end of the Screbbook"는 "went to complete the scrapbook"으로 자연스럽게 고쳤습니다.
   (Revised "went to the end of the Screbbook" to "went to complete the scrapbook" for clarity.)
3. "her"는 "him"으로 수정하여 Max와의 대명사가 일치하도록 했습니다.
   (Changed "her" to "him" to ensure consistency with Max.)
4. Max가 장난감을 사용한 방식과 Ruby와 Louise가 어떤 반응을 보였는지 더 구체적으로 추가하면 이야기가 더 흥미로워질 수 있습니다.
   (Adding more detail about how Max used his toy and how Ruby and Louise reacted could make the story more engaging.)