Re: 1/18 summary [Jintaek]

[Teacher1]

The title of this story is "Caillou Goes to a Theme Park."

Caillou went to a theme park with his family.

First, he rode a rover ride whit river ride with his dad.

That was very fun and scary.

Next, they eat ate lunch and dessert.

And they rode very high ride Then, they went on a very high ride.

It was very fun.

And he saw a Teddy Bear After that, he saw a teddy bear.

It was the biggest teddy bear he had ever seen.

He had to throw in a ring to get it.

But he couldn't do it.

But his dad could do it However, his dad succeeded.

Finally, they got it.

And they came back to home Then, they went back home.

I think this story is interesting.

Score: A-

Tips)

1. "rover ride whit"는 "river ride with"로 고쳐야 정확해요.
   (Correct "rover ride whit" to "river ride with" for accuracy.)
2. "eat"는 과거형인 "ate"로 수정해요.
   (Change "eat" to "ate" as it's in the past tense.)
3. "throw in a ring"은 "throw a ring"으로 고치는 것이 더 자연스러워요.
   (Change "throw in a ring" to "throw a ring" for better phrasing.)
4. 이야기를 더 재미있게 하려면 놀이기구를 탈 때의 느낌이나 아빠가 곰 인형을 얻을 때의 순간을 자세히 적어 보세요.
   (To make the story more engaging, add details about how Caillou felt on the rides or the moment his dad won the teddy bear.)