Re: Ruby&Max-hyeonghu

[Teacher1]

The title of the story is Ruby's Safari.

Max wanted to play with the crocodile toy with Ruby, but Ruby had to fill out the last page of the scrapbook with Louise.

Then Louise arrived, and Ruby said that if they didn't finish the backyard safari, they wouldn't get the badge.

Ruby and Louise went to finish the backyard safari. Louise was searching with binoculars when Max surprised her with the crocodile toy.

Ruby told Max that they were looking for special animals for the scrapbook, not playing around.

While they were searching for animal tracks, they heard a sound. But the sound was from Max's bird toy. They handed the toy back to Max and told him to leave so they could take their picture.

After that, Max continued to play with his toys. Then, Max played with the red elephant toy, and while Ruby was talking to him, a hummingbird appeared.

They took a picture, and the leader said that the red toy had attracted the hummingbird.

Score: A

Tips)

1. "if they didn't finish the backyard"는 문맥에 맞게 "if they didn't finish the backyard safari"로 더 명확히 수정했습니다.
   (Clarified "if they didn't finish the backyard" to "if they didn't finish the backyard safari.")
2. "told him to go"는 "told him to leave"로 수정하여 더 자연스럽게 표현했습니다.
   (Revised "told him to go" to "told him to leave" for smoother phrasing.)
3. Max의 행동이 Ruby와 Louise의 목표 달성을 어떻게 도왔는지 더 자세히 추가하면 이야기가 더 풍부해질 수 있습니다.
   (Adding more detail about how Max's actions helped Ruby and Louise achieve their goal could make the story more engaging.)