ROALD DAHL THE WITCHES
Chapter 16 Page 137-146
The Mouse-Burglar
ORIGINAL ENTRY:
The grandma took out her knitting. Then she asked if he is ready and is okay. Then the witch came to the balcony and said who he is and what is she doing. Them the grandma said that she is telling her grandson to come out from the bathroom and she accidentally dropped her sock that she was knitting.
Then she said that she can pull it by herself. Then the boy went in the bed and took the bottle then the witch came and saw that the frogs are there. He came out from the hiding place and he brought it to the balcony.
Then the mouse which was the boy climbed on the socks and the grandma was relieved and she pulled the socks up. Then the boy asked the grandma if she saw the grand high witch. She said that she saw and she even knew that it was a fake face which is a mask she thought it was her real face. She said that it is very good made.
FINAL ENTRY WITH CORRECTIONS;
The grandma took out her knitting. Then she asked him if he was ready. Then the witch came to the balcony and she was shouting. She’s asking if who was calling, if who dares to trespass on her balcony. Then the grandma said that she was talking to her little grandson to come out from the bathroom and she was accidentally dropped her sock that she was knitting.
Then she said that she can pull it by herself. Then the boy went to the bed and took the bottle then the witch came and saw that the frogs are there. He came out from the hiding place and he brought it to the balcony.
Then the mouse which was the boy climbed on the socks and the grandma was relieved and she pulled the socks up. Then the boy asked the grandma if she saw the grand high witch. She said that she saw and she even knew that it was a fake face which is a mask she thought it was her real face. She said to the little mouse that he did it well.
Comment:
Thanks for sending your summary Roni. There’s a lot missing here in your summary. Like how did the mouse enter into the Grand High Witch’s room? You also forgot to describe the Grand High Witch’s room. How come he had an idea where to find the little bottle? What were the things under the bed? What happened at the exact moment, What was the alibi made by the grandmother to answer the Grand High Witch, How did the mouse get out of the Grand High Witch’s room and Why did the mouse shout?
Next time Roni please make your summary completely. Anyways I appreciate your idea regarding to the story.
Keep it up!!
Teacher Bern.