Re: Max and Ruby - Albert

[Teacher Winget]

The tilte title of this story is "Max and Ruby."

Max was playing pirate.
Then Ruby asked me him to help prepare for her tea party.
But Max used the tablecloth to play pirate.
And he also used napkins for pirate games.
Ruby saw it and said, "Pirates were are not invited."
But Max kept messing around.
He took Ruby's dolls and let her walk made her walk them on the cardboard.
Ruby brought the dolls back and go went to bring get her necklace.
But Ruby's jewelry box and necklace were gone.
Ruby thinks thought Max used it for pirate his pirate game, so she found searched for treasure with Max.
When she found the necklace and the jewelry box, Ruby invited Max to the tea party.

I think Max's pirate games is looking look very fun! Yo Ho Ho!

Score: A-

Tips)

1. 문법: "asked me" 대신 "asked him"이라고 해야 해요. 그리고 "Max's pirate games is looking" 대신 "Max's pirate games look"이라고 해야 해요.
2. 내용 추가: "왜 Ruby는 Max를 다시 초대했을까요? Max가 보물을 찾는 것을 도와줬기 때문일 수 있어요!