Re: Max and Ruby (Olivia)

[Teacher Winget]

The title of this story is "Ruby's Pajama Party."

I will summarize the Max and Ruby story.

Ruby decided to have a pajama party with her friends.
Max wanted to have a pajama party, join the pajama party, but Ruby told Max that only girls could have pajama party. join.

They had a makeover and had a fassion show. a fashion show.
Max said he wanted to have a pajama party, join the party, but Ruby said no.

Then, Ruby, Louise, and Valerie danced.
Max brought a chick toy to dance with, and Ruby said to Max might have a pajama party. Max could join the pajama party.

After the dance, Louise and Valerie said they were tired, so Ruby prepared a snack. snacks.
But Max played slow music, so everyone fell asleep.

I think Max wants to not only have a party but also have a snack. wanted not only to join the party but also to eat the snacks.

Score: A-

Tips)

1. 문법: "have a pajama party" 대신 "join the pajama party," "fassion show" 대신 "fashion show," "a snack" 대신 "snacks"라고 해야 자연스럽습니다.
2. 내용 추가: Max가 결국 자신의 방식으로 파티에 참여하며 즐겼던 점을 강조하면 글이 더욱 흥미로워질 것입니다!