The title of this story is Caillou's Teddy Shirts.
The main character is Caillou.
He is just a kid and four years old. He likes exploring and has many things to do. One day, Caillou played with his teddy bair bear. He trimble tumbled his toy car. Suddenly, Rosie came, and she wanted to play with him, but she wore his favorite shirt. So he is was cried and mad. But his favorite shirt was so small. So he was very sad and go went to his room. In time, his mom is pursuaded persuaded him. So he is left let go of his favorite shirt.
After reading this story, I think this is nice.
Score: B+
Tips:
- 'trimble his toy car' → 'tumbled his toy car'로 고쳐야 해요. 'trimble' 대신 'tumbled'가 더 자연스러워요.
- 'he is cried and mad' → 'he was crying and mad'로 고쳐서 더 정확한 과거 시제 표현을 사용해요.
- 'left his favorite shirt' 대신 'let go of his favorite shirt'로 하면 더 자연스러운 표현이 될 수 있어요.
- 추가 설명: Caillou의 감정 변화에 대해 더 설명해 보세요. 예를 들어, 왜 Caillou가 처음엔 화가 났지만 나중에 엄마가 설득한 후 어떻게 기분이 나아졌는지.