Re: Max and Ruby(Luna)

[Teacher Winget]

Ruby was readying getting ready for the pajama party.
She made cheese crackers.

Max wanted to enjoy the party too, but Ruby said his he was not invited.

Then Louise and Valerie came to Ruby’s house.

First, they introdused introduced their pajamas.
Second, they read magazines together.
But Max bother bothered them.

Theird Third, they did makeovers.
Also, they did had fashion shows.

Forth Fourth, they danced together.
Finally, Max could join the party.

Last Lastly, they ate cheese crackers.
But Louise and Valerie were slept fell asleep because Max turn on turned on slow music.

So Max ate the cheese crackers.

I think Max is slyboots. a sly little fox.

Score: B+

Tips)

1. 문법: "readying" 대신 "getting ready," "turn on" 대신 "turned on," "were slept" 대신 "fell asleep"라고 수정해야 자연스럽습니다.
2. 내용 추가: Max가 결국 파티에 참여하게 된 것에 대해 Ruby가 어떻게 느꼈는지, 그리고 그의 장난기 넘치는 행동이 어떻게 재미를 더했는지 언급하면 더 흥미로울 것입니다!