Re: Max and Ruby- Jia

[Teacher Winget]

Valerie, Ruby, and Louise are order to pajama party. organized a pajama party.

Ruby prepared many things.

They except Max for pajama party, Because Max didn't worn pajama.
didn’t allow Max to join the pajama party because he wasn’t wearing pajamas.

They continue kick out Max, kept kicking Max out, so Max worn wore his pajamas.
But his pajamas was caught on his ears. got stuck on his ears.

However, Max kicked out from them. was still kicked out.

So, Max copied all their acts. activities.
And Max made their mind relax to play with his toy. got them to relax and play with his toy.

While Ruby bring her snacks, was bringing her snacks, Max turn on the Jazz to help their sleep. turned on jazz music to help them fall asleep.

By the way, her snacks are eating by Max. Meanwhile, Max ate her snacks.

Score: B+

Tips)

1. 문법: "are order to pajama party" 대신 "organized a pajama party," "continue kick out Max" 대신 "kept kicking Max out," "her snacks are eating by Max" 대신 "Max ate her snacks"로 수정해야 자연스럽습니다.
2. 내용 추가: Ruby와 친구들이 Max를 파티에 받아들이면서 느꼈던 감정이나 반응을 추가하면 글이 더 풍부해질 것입니다!