The title of this story is “Max & Ruby- Camp Out.” The main characters are Max and Ruby. This story is based on Rosemary Wells's work.
One day, Ruby wanted to sleep inside a tent because the weather was so hot. However, Max wanted to sleep just outside, not inside a tent. Ruby told him to sleep in the tent and to find and give her a flashlight. She also told him to find and give her a sleeping bag, radio, and pillow while she prepared to sleep in the tent. But Max still wanted to sleep outside and put his toys in the pillows. He also put his books in the sleeping bag. When the sun went down, she told Max to go inside the tent before she brought marshmallows. But he didn’t want to sleep in the tent until the end, and he pushed his toys in to and kept pushing his toys into the tent. Finally, he could sleep outside the tent!
I think Max is really clever too, but Ruby is one step ahead! (how id she ahead of Max? I think Max got his way to sleep outside.)
Grade: B+
Tips:
- Combine some sentences to improve the flow.
- Use consistent verb tenses.
- Explain how Ruby felt when she saw the mess Max had made.