Re: Max and Ruby (Austin)

[Teacher Winget]

I'm going to introduce Max and Ruby today. It's going to be cool. Episode 1's title is "Ruby's Pajama Party."

Valerie, Ruby, and Louis Louise went to Ruby's pajama party.
Ruby prepared a lot.

But because Maxx didn't bring his pajamas, Max didn’t wear pajamas, Max was excluded from the pajama party.

They squeezed Max out, kicked Max out, but Max put his pajamas on. put on his pajamas.
But he got his pajamas stuck in his ears and was excluded again.

Then Max copied their behavior, and Max helped him sleep turned on slow music to make them sleep,
and ate a Ruby snack while Ruby went to cover his snack. ate Ruby’s snacks while Ruby was preparing more snacks.

Score: B+

Tips)

1. 문법: "Maxx didn't bring his pajamas" 대신 "Max didn’t wear pajamas," "squeezed Max out" 대신 "kicked Max out," "ate a Ruby snack" 대신 "ate Ruby’s snacks"로 수정해야 자연스럽습니다.
2. 내용 추가: Ruby와 친구들이 결국 Max를 받아들였을 때의 반응이나 파티 분위기를 더 묘사하면 글이 더 풍부해질 것입니다!