Re: Caillou Summary (Mark)

[Teacher Winget]

The title of this story is "Caillou Goes Round the Block."

The main character is Caillou.

He is just a kid and four years old. He likes exploring and has many things to do. Caillou loved riding fast on a shiny new bicycle. Then, Caillou saw a squirrel to ate eating his cookie. So he is was mad and he called his mom. But his mom is was asleep. So Caillou went outside, and he wanted to go around the corner by himself. He went to the corner and stood by the sprinkler. Caillou walked ahead, than then Caillou saw his friend. She was playing hopscotch, and Caillou played with her. A few minutes later, Caillou continued ahead. Suddenly, a dog is appeared, so Caillou is serprised was surprised. But Caillou continued ahead. He met his mom and dad's friend, and Caillou went home.

Score: A-

Tips:

1. 'to ate' 대신 'eating'이 자연스럽습니다. 동사를 현재분사로 바꾸면 문맥에 맞습니다.
2. 'is mad'와 'is asleep' 대신 'was mad'와 'was asleep'이 더 맞는 표현입니다. 과거 시제에 맞추어 표현해야 해요.
3. 'than'은 비교할 때 사용하는 단어예요. 여기서는 'then'이 맞습니다.
4. 'is surprised'도 과거 시제에 맞추어 'was surprised'로 수정했습니다.
5.  추가 팁:이야기 마지막 부분에서 감정을 더 추가해보면 좋을 것 같아요. 예를 들어, 엄마와 아빠 친구를 만나서 기분이 어땠는지, 집에 돌아왔을 때 기분은 어땠는지를 더 설명하면 이야기가 더 풍부해질 수 있어요!