Re: Max and Ruby - Albert

[Teacher Winget]

The title of this story is 'Max and Ruby'.

Max's overall is overalls were very old.

So Ruby and Max went shop to the shop.

But Max want wanted the dragon shirt.

But Ruby has had 5 dollar dollars to buy a new overall pair of overalls.

So when Ruby was dressing up, Max goes went and wear wore the dragon shirt.

And Max eat ate the iceram ice cream and dredge spilled it on the shirt.

So Ruby buy bought the dragon shirt.

I think max Max is very cute.

Score: B+

Tips)

1. 문법: "Max's overall is very old" 대신 "Max's overalls were very old"라고 해야 하고, "Max eat the ice cream and dredge it on the shirt" 대신 "Max ate the ice cream and spilled it on the shirt"이라고 해야 자연스럽습니다.
2. 내용 추가: Max가 어떻게 아이스크림을 먹으면서 셔츠를 더럽혔는지, 그리고 Ruby의 반응이 어땠는지 더 자세히 설명해 보세요!