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[취직을하자꼭하자]

자기소개를 영어로 말하긴데 대충 기억하고 외우려는데 문법적인 요소를 좀 봐주세요


befor start to my introduction thanks for giving me chanse to explain my self.
my name is 홍길동 who is a man of passion and sincerity.
i grated depatment of mechanical design at the 홍익 universty.
humorous father and christian mother have made me mile character.
i always make an effort to meet a respectable persone.
my weakness is too much thingking.
so when i have to decide songthing, usualy it take longer time than the other poeple.
everything has good point &bad point. i'd just like to figure out the best way.

and as i said my merits are passion and sincerity.
for instance, when i was working as a sales clerk at XXXX, i was given a daily quota from my boss.
eventhough the sales quota was set at a hight numberm i always did my best to reach that goal.
i know me. i might not have ability in English for working with company. (여기서 woring for 컴퍼니 와 with 컴퍼니 둘중 뭐가 어울리나요)

but there's a thing that i only can tell u is no metter what situation, i always have a tendency to try my best to complete the tasks that
are assigned to me.





그리고 이건 별로로.. 한문장 작문인데요

the movie is a story of the man's process of chanllenge

이거 말이 되나요?

[가이샤잉]

The story of the movie was about a man's process of the challenge. 이게 더 자연스러울것 같아요.

[Dan ^^]

The movie is based on the story of 블라블라 가 가장 나을 듯