I was taken pictures in commemoration of graduation.

<xhtml> <head>  <link rel=Original-File href="file:///C:/Documents%20and%20Settings/Owner/바탕%20화면/Your%20writing.doc"> <title>Your writing</title> <style>  </style> </head> <xbody bgcolor="#FFFFFF" link=blue vlink=purple class="Normal" lang=EN-US> <div class=Section1> <table border=1 cellpadding=0 cellspacing=0 bordercolor="#000000"> <tr bgcolor="#CCCCCC"> <td width=291 valign=top class="Normal"> Your writing</td> <td width=291 valign=top class="Normal"> My corrections</td> </tr> <tr> <td width=291 valign=top class="Normal"> I was taken pictures in commemoration of graduation. I was taken pictures in commemoration of graduation. I arrived at my university about at 9 : 30 for being taken the pictures. I could make many memories while I was attending my university. I remember the moment when the engineering dean addressed for the freshmen. He said that we had unlimited potential and our future would be created by our efforts. When I entered my university, I had many dreams. Although I have done my best to achieve my vision for 8 years, I am feeling something wanting about the period of my university. I wandered many times to decide my purpose of life. I wanted to be a professor of my major so I decided to go Germany when I was a freshman. But I could not carry out my vision for professor because of many problems. I sometimes think that if I went abroad to study my major more, I could be a professor. </td> <td width=291 valign=top class="Normal"> I <ins cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee" datetime="2004-09-14T00:04">took </ins><del cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee" datetime="2004-09-14T00:04">was taken</del> pictures in commemoration of <ins cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee" datetime="2004-09-14T00:05">my </ins>graduation. I <ins cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee" datetime="2004-09-14T00:05">took </ins><del cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee" datetime="2004-09-14T00:05">was taken</del> pictures in commemoration of <ins cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee" datetime="2004-09-14T00:05">my </ins>graduation. I arrived at my university about at 9 :<del cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee" datetime="2004-09-14T00:05"> </del>30 <del cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee" datetime="2004-09-14T00:05">for being taken</del> <ins cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee" datetime="2004-09-14T00:05">to take </ins>the pictures. I <del cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee" datetime="2004-09-14T00:05">could make </del><ins cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee" datetime="2004-09-14T00:05">made </ins>many memories while I was attending my university. I remember the moment when the engineering dean addressed <del cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee" datetime="2004-09-14T00:06">for</del> the freshmen. He said that we had unlimited potential and our future would be created by our efforts. When I entered my university, I had many dreams. Although I have done my best to achieve my vision for 8 years, I am feeling <ins cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee" datetime="2004-09-14T00:06">[</ins>something wanting<ins cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee" datetime="2004-09-14T00:06">]??</ins> about the period of my university. I wandered many times to decide my purpose of life. I wanted to be a professor of my major so I decided to go Germany when I was a freshman. But I could not carry out my vision <ins cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee" datetime="2004-09-14T00:06">to become a </ins><del cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee" datetime="2004-09-14T00:06">for</del> professor because of many problems. I sometimes think that if I went abroad to study my major more, I could <ins cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee" datetime="2004-09-14T00:07">have become </ins><del cite="mailto:Jim%20Lee" datetime="2004-09-14T00:07">be</del> a professor. </td> </tr> <tr> <td width=581 colspan=2 valign=top class="Normal"> Comment: Excellent writing!  Personal Comment: Don’t ever wonder about what could have happened…instead be content with what you have now.</td> </tr> </table> </div> </xbody> </xhtml>