헤럴드 영어 365 - Day 008 [라이팅_8월10일 기출문제] 무료영어공부 + 목표달성 하신 회원님의 따뜻한

[헤럴드밴쿠버다운타운]

안녕하세요. 헤럴드 밴쿠버 다운타운, Charlie 입니다.

영어수업을 하면서 가장 기분좋은 순간 중 하나는, 회원분들이 원하는 목표점수를 달성하셨을때인것 같아요.

CLB 7 은 IELTS each band 6 에 상응하는 점수입니다.

오늘 강의중에 오셔서 인사도 못드렸는데 선물만 주고 가셨네요.

정말 감사드립니다, **구님. 그리고 다시한번 축하드립니다!

오늘은 지난 8월 10일 토요일 기출문제를 가져왔습니다.

In some countries worldwide, men and women have children at a later age than in the past. What are the reasons for this development? What are the effects on society and family life?

이번 기출에서 주목해야 하는 부분은 바로 최근에 계속 해서 나오고 있는  사회 문제 (Social matter) 라는 점과 2021년에 정확하게 똑같은 문제가 나왔었다는 점이에요.

한국개발연구원(KDI) 경제정보센터 송인호 소장은 8월13일 언론기고에서, 

출산 문제는 단순히 인구 감소의 문제가 아니다. 이는 국가의 경제력 및 미래 성장 동력과 직결되는 중대한 사안이다. 육아하는 직원에 대한 부정적 시선을 줄이고, 이들이 안심하고 일할 수 있는 환경을 조성하는 것은 개인의 삶의 질을 높일 뿐만 아니라, 국가 경제에도 긍정적인 영향을 미친다. 따라서, 우리 사회도 이러한 노력을통해 더 나은 미래를 만들어가야 할 것이다. 
https://www.kdi.re.kr/share/pressContriView?bd_no=50477#

라고 이야기 하고 있어요.

***POINT***

이번에 출제된 문제는 저출산문제가 아니라, 

과거에 비해 출산의 연령이 늦어지고 있는 이유와 사회와 가정에 미치는 영향을 묻고 있습니다.

intro

body 1-이유

body 2-사회에 미치는 영향

body 3-가정에 미치는 영향

conclusion-해결방안제시

이렇게 우선 아웃라인을 잡고..

함께 아이디어 생각해볼까요?

Brainstorming

1. Reasons for Having Children Later (아이를 늦게 가지는 이유):

Career Focus (경력 집중): 많은 남성과 여성이 가족을 시작하기 전에 경력과 재정적 안정을 우선시합니다.

; Many men and women prioritize their careers and seek financial stability before starting a family.

Educational Pursuits (교육 추구): 고등 학위 취득과 같은 학업 연장으로 인해 가족 계획이 지연됩니다.

; Extended years of education, such as pursuing advanced degrees, delay family planning.

Economic Factors (경제적 요인): 생활비, 주거비, 육아 비용의 상승으로 인해 출산을 미루게 됩니다.

; High costs of living, housing, and childcare lead to postponing parenthood.

Changing Social Norms (변화하는 사회적 규범): 결혼과 출산을 늦추는 것에 대한 사회적 수용성이 증가하고, 젊은 나이에 결혼해야 한다는 압박감이 줄어들고 있습니다.

; Societal acceptance of delayed parenthood and less pressure to marry young.

Personal Fulfillment (개인적 성취): 사람들은 정착하기 전에 개인적인 목표, 여행, 삶의 경험을 우선시할 수 있습니다.

; People may prioritize personal goals, travel, and life experiences before settling down.

2. Effects on Society (사회에 미치는 영향):

Aging Population (인구 고령화): 젊은 인구가 줄어들어 인구 고령화가 진행될 수 있으며, 이는 경제적, 사회적도전에 직면할 수 있습니다.

; Fewer young people may lead to an aging population, with potential economic and social challenges.

Workforce Impact (노동력에 미치는 영향): 젊은 노동 인구의 감소로 사회 보장 제도에 부담이 가중되며 노동력부족으로 이어질 수 있습니다.

; A smaller younger workforce may strain social security systems and lead to labor shortages.

Shifts in Healthcare (보건 의료 변화): 불임 치료와 연령 관련 의료 서비스에 대한 수요가 증가할 수 있습니다.

; Increased demand for fertility treatments and age-related healthcare services.

3. Effects on Family Life (가정 생활에 미치는 영향):

Generational Gap (세대 간 격차): 부모와 자녀 사이의 나이 차이가 커지면서 관계와 공유 경험에 영향을 미칠수있습니다.

; A larger age gap between parents and children can affect relationships and shared experiences.

Health Risks (건강 위험): 나이 든 부모는 임신과 출산 중 더 높은 건강 위험에 직면할 수 있습니다.

; Older parents may face higher health risks during pregnancy and childbirth.

Financial Stability (재정 안정성): 가정은 더 많은 재정적 자원과 안정성을 누릴 수 있습니다.

; Families may benefit from greater financial resources and stability.

Parental Involvement (부모의 참여): 나이 든 부모는 감정적, 재정적으로 자녀를 더 잘 지원할 수 있을 만큼 성숙할 수 있습니다.

; Older parents might be more mature and better equipped to provide for their children emotionally and financially.

이 정도로 아이디어를 정리할 수 있겠습니다.

더 좋은 아이디어 있으시면 댓글에 공유해주세요!

이제 한번 에세이를 써볼까요?

[intro]

In recent years, there has been a noticeable trend in many countries where men and women are choosing to have children at a later age than in the past. This shift is driven by various factors and has significant implications for both society and family life.

[body 1]

One of the primary reasons for this development is the growing emphasis on career and education. In today’s competitive job market, many individuals, especially women, are prioritizing their professional growth and educational attainment before considering starting a family. This delay is often necessary to achieve financial stability, which is increasingly important given the rising costs of living, housing, and childcare. Additionally, changing social norms have reduced the pressure to marry and have children at a young age, allowing people to focus on personal fulfillment and life experiences first.

[body 2]

The decision to have children later in life has several effects on society. One significant consequence is the aging population. With fewer young people being born, there is a growing proportion of older individuals, which can strain social security systems and healthcare services. Moreover, this demographic shift may lead to labor shortages and a decrease in the younger workforce, which could impact economic growth.

[body 3]

On the family level, having children later in life can lead to both positive and negative outcomes. On one hand, older parents are often more financially secure and emotionally mature, which can lead to a more stable and nurturing environment for their children. However, there are also potential downsides, such as health risks associated with later pregnancies and the possibility of a larger generational gap between parents and children, which could affect their relationship dynamics.

[conclusion]

In conclusion, the trend of having children at a later age is influenced by various factors, including career aspirations, educational pursuits, and economic considerations. While this development brings certain advantages, it also poses challenges for both society and family life. As such, it is crucial for policymakers to address these issues to ensure a balanced and sustainable future for all generations.

(334 words / expecting band 7)

저출산 문제 뿐 아니라, 출산연령이 높아지고 있는 문제로 함께 아이디어 정리하고 에세이까지 써보았습니다.

다른 원인과 해결방안까지 한번쯤 생각해보시고 정리해두시면 좋겠습니다.

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