[영작 수정부탁] 횽아..소자가 조금 끄적였습니다.수정해주세여

[Ryanseo]

첫번째 자기소개서

First of all, thank you for giving me a chance to have an interview with your company.

My name is XXX.

1  I'm really good at adapting myself in any circumstance that’s one of my traits

since I joined the association of foreign students so that I gained a natural understanding for other cultures and builted a good relationship with foreign students. After dismissed the military service, I’ve taken a various experiences to be adapted in workfoce such as daily worker,teacher in education institution and tour guide Although this position is not what I wanted to be, but I believe it is also going to be one of the my spec that support me when there is a opportunity for the position of Trading.

I have almost concluded my introduction, but I have one thing left to say.

I believe that success isn't achieved by a person who is only waiting for it. It is a result for a person who makes an effort. With strong challenging mentality, boundless passion, and thorough preparation pursuing for change, I will put myself in the constant development. I will try to present a clear vision by asking myself "What can I do for xxx?"
Thank you very much for your time.

2번째 자기소개서.

 First of all, thank you for giving me a chance to have an interview with your company.

My name is XXX

 I have a positive mind and be always sincere that’s one of my traits.

When I treat everything positively, I can cheerfully overcome hard and difficult obstacles. As a result, I can confidently complete any task given to me.

And another is that I can be easily adapted in any circumstance from various experiences such as studying abroad which was starteds a bit earlier than the others,daily worker,teacher in education insitiution,tour guide. Although this position is not what I wanted to be, but I believe it is aslo going to be one of the my spec that support me when there is a opportunity for the position of Trading that is what I am pursuing.

I have almost concluded my introduction, but I have one thing left to say.

I believe that success isn't achieved by a person who is only waiting for it. It is a result for a person who makes an effort. With strong challenging mentality, boundless passion, and thorough preparation pursuing for change, I will put myself in the constant development. I will try to present a clear vision by asking myself "What can I do for xxx?"
Thank you very much for your time.

신입지원이라.. 알바경험바탕으로 작성했습니다.

영어 자기소개할때 이런식으로 해도 되나요??

한국말로 자기소개 하는거랑 똑같이 해야하나요??

횽아!!  1or 2 몇번째가 더 괜찮나요???

틀린부분이나 어색한 부분 수정부탁드립니다.ㅠ.ㅠ

면접은 임박하고ㅠ.ㅠ. 빨리 외워야하는데...

[ZZang2]

First of all, thank you for giving me this opportunity to have an interview. I'm positive at everything and always drive myself optimistically and it makes me to overcome the hardness. My greatest strength is that i have adaptable personality as i could have abroad experience and it makes my ability to adapt to all situation. 이런식으로 나가는게 좋지 않을까요? 어차피 영어로 하는건데... 궂치 konglish 스타일 할필요 없지 않을까요? 잘 아시겠지만 영어는 간단한것 좋아하고,, 그리고 이력서에 다 써버리면 가서 할 말 없잖아요 원하시면 제 resume 보내 드릴께요 참고 하시라구요

[Ryanseo]

아..자기소개 스피치 용입니다.. 부디 cover letter 보내주세요ㅜ.ㅜ ryansoul@naver.com

[Ryanseo]

님!! 감사합니다..축복받으시길!! ↑ 스피치용으로 가능한지요??